Am i ready to pass

(( Heres another try for this ))

Seamus enterd the mess hall his hair was slicked back and cute. Seamus walked hold his sword he was doing this for ages. " Ah such a lovely day and heck of the world look at the time." . Seamus danced through the prevailion and smiled and grined at the girls.Seamus contuied walking. Why was Eliza mad at her because he didnt wanna date her. " Girls are so crazy." Seamus walked away and snorted He was already mad at his friends didnt need to get more mad. Seamus looked at the campers and drew a stealy smile. " What a day mates." Seamus walked and laughed evily like he was planning a scem. Then he looked at the campers and winked.

...May I suggest using Microsoft Word, and using the spellcheck feature? the number of red and green lines will say a little something... at any rate, I suggest thinking before you write. try and find this sorta magical thing known as "Muse", a semi mystical flow of creativity that inspires RP Skill in users.

Do I smell powerplay here? I know this is just for school but did you ask Eliza permission to claim that she wanted to date your char before rejection her? If not, it counts as powerplay and we don't want you to take on that habit. (I might have misread it though, but that is what it looks like)

Also, I posted a list of RP tips in the RP-school section that you might want to take a look at. I think it really helps if you try to follow those tips.

Good luck with the school!!!

PS, I noticed about half the posts in the RP school belong to you. To avoid clogging I want to ask you to post your improved RP's in one of your previous topics. You don't need a new topic for each try to pass in the RP school.

Just for instance we do need permission to ask people if they want to date us.

No, you can make couples by yourselves without permission. Powerplay is RP-ing the characters of other people without their permission.

Okay thank you my goddess bows.

Guys, I would appreciate it if you guys don't spam, ask a staff please Kendall next time or ask in the Randomness Chat